| = . | corina dragomir [01.May.05 02:46] |
| 1). use of cliche, cold hard facts, also dulls the poem. however if you desire to write in rhymed format it must be clean; 2.) although there is emotion in this exchange it cannot be fulfilled by means of forced rhyme. I am sorry but this poem doesn't work for me for many reasons. obviously, the effort put into finding those rhymes lessens the impact of the message considerably. | |
| = Just your self | Joshua Vasquez Butawan [30.May.05 05:15] |
| I like how you express your self, well lets not mind others through thir comments, lets just keep our feelings to us, it is better that we know our selve rather than others teels us what we are made of, what is our aura. By the way keep up expressing your self through literature, because me I make literature not to make an impression but only to show my desires and feeling towards the happenings | |