| = awsome poem, awsome woman:))) | nicolae aurelian [26.Jan.05 22:34] |
| If death look like u ....than take me now!!:)) very nice poem, i like what u write a lot honey! | |
| = fire is warm , but dangerous too :) | Cristea Loredana [09.Feb.05 12:50] |
| honey , death doesn`t looks like me ( at least i hope so ) , but i don`t know if i look like her :) . anyway , my black hair is just a litlle thing that we have in common . i don`t have a mowing , but i have two very black eyes ( in the night , because during the day they are green ) . do u still want me to take you ? :)) | |
| = Death is in love with us | Antal Adrian [21.Apr.05 14:51] |
| I love Death, and I can only hope she loves me back... Your poem, in my opinion, could make almost anyone feel good about Death, make a good impression of her... I don't need that :D... Reading it[your poem] reminds me of her[Death] so vividly, I can almost feel her embrasse, so calming, I often forget and I wonder where She is... thank you for reminding me.... She's right beside me, inside me, for me, forever... | |
| = Adrian | Lory Cristea [22.Apr.05 23:37] |
| You know , Adrian , that is the point , and you got it just right here . Yes , it`s about THAT Death , the end that means just another begining ... the beauty behind darkness . Thank you for passing by ... Kisses . | |
| = Lory | raj thampi [23.Apr.05 12:39] |
| Lory I like the way you write. Its not irony. Your mind has vivid images, and flow. Just take more care with the spellings. Use MS Word with english dictionary support & You will be doing great. Regards, | |
| = Raj | Lory Cristea [23.Apr.05 12:43] |
| I am trying to become better every day , and with help from people like you i will make it . Thank you . Kisses , Lory | |
| = Lory | Preoteasa Marinela [27.Apr.05 02:31] |
| Lory, I watch gladly "Lady in Black ". Presentation eloquently, plastic. | |
| = Dark embrace | Diana Pacuraru [09.May.05 19:58] |
| Wouldn't we all want to die if it would be so? Still, people hate death. Your poem is good, indeed, I enjoyed the romantic vision about death, the dark embrace. | |
| = to be or not to be...dead :) | Lory Cristea [11.May.05 22:25] |
| We are afraid of unknowing events ... that`s why death isn`t so popular . Also , this is the reason that made me pay attention on this subject ... and i really enjoyed it :) . thank you very much` ... Lory | |
| = 12 | corina dragomir [11.May.05 22:57] |
| 1). the death - death (no article) - (subtitle) 2). at the midnight - at midnight (preposition indicating location in time) 3). wrinkless - wrinkles 4). brunt - burnt 5). parfume - perfume 6). *And it is pushing with power your chest* - incoherent verse. 7). maded - made (irreg.vb) 8). with patient – with patience 9). *putting in them her mowing* - putting her mowing into them (vb + direct object + …) 10). cryes – cries (-y turns into –i, 3rd p. sg, SPT) 11). convicted to live eternal in mud – eternally, always etc (adverb needed) 12). Powerfull - powerful | |
| = Corina :) | Lory Cristea [11.May.05 23:27] |
| Thank you Corina, but not all of your observations were correct, thank`s for passing by and also, for help:) Lory | |
| = . | corina dragomir [11.May.05 23:35] |
| hmm. which ones were incorrect? c'mon let's not play hide-and-seek. | |