| = it could be shorter | ion amariutei [23.Feb.05 16:36] |
| liked the first and last stanzas, the sense of organic intimacy between emotions and the world at large. by the same token, the second one seems intrusive, declamatory, artificial: *crying... against the Heaven/ and the inconsequential/ harpies/ of our fate*. | |
| = love... | Luminita Baboianu [14.Apr.05 23:01] |
| ... like a plague. Strong and direct. *To conclude: love... | |
| = river of love | Edilberto González Trejos [09.Dec.05 02:05] |
| Many metaphores like a plurality of creeks leading us to a Wider River: LOVE, It takes us to an Ocean full of Endless possibilities. Cheers SONGO | |