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= opinion
Marius Surleac
[13.Jun.09 12:51]
I think your text might need some syntax revising, some hard polish on the construction of this poem. And I suggest you in the future to write poetry as it comes and then apply a tough self critic on the writing - as it is right now, many wrote this kind of poetry, there's nothing new that hits down the reader, and the rhyming looks like being forced. The big amount of repetitions doesn't help at all your poem.
= thank you
Contes Diana Alexandra
[14.Jun.09 22:30]
..for the comment and opinion, which i`ll take into consideration and try to write (a whole lot) better hereafter :)

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= opinion	Marius Surleac [13.Jun.09 12:51]
I think your text might need some syntax revising, some hard polish on the construction of this poem. And I suggest you in the future to write poetry as it comes and then apply a tough self critic on the writing - as it is right now, many wrote this kind of poetry, there's nothing new that hits down the reader, and the rhyming looks like being forced. The big amount of repetitions doesn't help at all your poem.

= thank you	Contes Diana Alexandra [14.Jun.09 22:30]
..for the comment and opinion, which i`ll take into consideration and try to write (a whole lot) better hereafter :)