| = Marius | Corina Gina Papouis [16.Jun.09 17:35] |
| a rich text, complex meanings and self analysis: its like looking in the mirror while trying to operate on your brain :)or something like that. i liked the detail: the force-fed jingle/ the candy candle induces the reader into that trance, that obsessiveness that pollutes the mind. healing is the only way:) cheers, Corina | |
| = errr | Corina Gina Papouis [16.Jun.09 17:37] |
| I think I meant Dan, although I am never sure...:) | |
| = . | Marius Surleac [16.Jun.09 20:59] |
| I don't know but looks like you change your style, bringing more lyricism. As well I observe the attention for details, and the dilution of reality, of senses. Cheers! | |
| + "now choke so gently" | Laurenţiu Ion [16.Jun.09 21:52] |
| it's something else - how you grab the feelings and drag them through the collage of your thoughts clear immediately to yourself yet intricate and spun through unusual things & ideas to finally crystallise them as poems. I really appreciate the lines arranged in a scenario frame or this may be just a personal way of seeing things. this poem is so visual - I can really imagine its scenes flowing like the images of a good movie. well done! | |
| = 2 in 1 | Simona Sumanaru [17.Jun.09 11:28] |
| you kneel and light the candy candle and talk me through my laughing ruin wrapped [UP] in your force-fed jingle consumed by your endless riddle you will heal me that's how I read your poem. the second one. did I mention I see two poems in one? ... a story of confession, becoming, the healing power of light (to me). sorry, I have this big flaw of taking things personally. :-) truly wonderful and well inspired. | |
| = ladies and gents | dan marius [18.Jun.09 17:07] |
| corina: it is indeed an insight of madness. it's obsessive but it has (an either ironic or) a happy ending :) marius: yes Sir, I like playing with words more than I did before. You did notice that. Thanks Ion : it is visual, it could work as a script, it's also personal and it's written with a lot of love. for words and images. thanks Sim: you know you're my favorite reader :) and yes, at some point I thought of erasing everything (but the second one) | |
| = rhythm | Constantin Delca [19.Jun.09 14:15] |
| i appreciate especially the stacatto rhythm of a metal song well connected with the descent into madness. cheers! | |
| = Madness? I'd rather say... | John Willy Kopperud [29.Jun.09 09:55] |
| ...the civilized mind's dependency upon stimulation, the longing for that "second wind", bringing those natural opiates forth. Really a nice piece, dan marius! Cheers from Willy | |
| = constantin, willy | dan marius [29.Jun.09 17:15] |
| constantin : really liked what you saw there. there's a lot of music in my writing willy: always an honor. good interpretation. let's say "the descent into the madness of the civilized world & mind" | |
| = wonderland... | Romulus Campan Maramuresanu [06.Jul.09 16:44] |
| Why am I so stirred by your gentle surrealism, yet so witty and edgy sometimes? „no life here, Sir/ you should try the strawberries” absolutely visual, even though psychedelic, yet so kind… The fine change in your detail-style is benefic. Missed you (all)… rcm | |
| = dan | dan marius [10.Jul.09 08:31] |
| welcome back. we missed you too. | |