| = ! | Corina Gina Papouis [16.Nov.09 12:54] |
| the rhymes and rhythm of the poetry is all over the place! some verses have stretched themselves far to thin over the content, I suggest you re-write the poem in blank verse. there are some original elements here, I particularly liked the: 'Stuffed up with wannafeels of You & I.' cheers, Corina | |