| = declamatory | Diana Todea [28.Dec.09 09:01] |
| This poem is far from clearity, not in a bad sense, but it exaggerates with declamation. Maybe is too artificial and badly constructed. The conclusion is put there but I cannot feel the rest, due to some emotions thrown together to form a poem. I would suggest to bring the message in a simpler form and without declamation. If the romantic touch is needed here then it can sound a little bit less obsolete. Cheers and Happy New year, Diana. | |
| = :D | Gunsel DJEMAL [28.Dec.09 20:25] |
| Thanks Diana I will work on it. Happy New Year. Cheers! | |