| = language... | Romulus Campan Maramuresanu [30.Dec.09 20:55] |
| Daiana, You seem to be willing to move onto another stage of thought expression, with much to be praised re the developing imagery behind the words, but much to be desired language-wise... This fantasy must come much closer to the language used by the classic fairy-tale writers, otherwise even your original thoughts would crumble beneath the poverty of expression. Read more, while keeping your own thoughts. Nice final thought, but somehow lost in between attempts to combine fantasy with the scarcity of language subtleties required though by the chosen genre... rcm | |