= 2 x suggestions:) | Corina Gina Papouis [12.Feb.10 13:15] |
slowly instead of slow (adverb!) and to avoid the repetition of word 'paint' try 'picture': 'Trying to picture your eyes in my head' i liked the poem, the last stanza has a lot of nerve.:) regards, Corina | |
= suggestion | nica ioana [12.Feb.10 15:36] |
Thank you for your suggestions once more | |
= Emotive, indeed. | Kuldeep Kumar Srivastava [12.Feb.10 17:05] |
A highly moving poem First two lines of last paragraph really emotive. Tegards | |
= Emotive, indeed. | Kuldeep Kumar Srivastava [12.Feb.10 17:06] |
A highly moving poem First two lines of last paragraph really emotive. Tegards | |
= diff | Veronica Valeanu [17.Feb.10 16:14] |
an idea might seem poetic if contrasted to common, ordinary speech - but it's not poetry, just because "being poetic" or "acting poetic" is at stake! | |