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=  2	Corina Gina Papouis [22.Jun.10 15:52]
i have 2 objections [minor ones, of course:)].. 1st - the title, 'the life' doesn't sound well...life through a second sound a lot nicer 2nd - the shape of the poem. 3 lines of a short poem squash it even more...let us give it a new shape.. time stops for your first and last kiss you feel paradoxically the death through necromancy this is the queer end of (a?) world that you’ll miss. this new shape allows the reader to breath...or so I felt. is a good poem:) cheers, Corina
=  err	Corina Gina Papouis [22.Jun.10 15:54]
*sounds a lot nicer, of course..:)
=  Thank you so much	Andreea Maresi [22.Jun.10 16:42]
I appreciate your advice. thank yous o much. You've right..I think that it is better this shape:) Thank you for support. I try more and more to improve my writting.
=  It's sad yet powerful	Cãtãrãu Alina - Andreea [22.Jun.10 18:01]
I like it1 Your poem it's short but it says a lot about love and death. Love lives as time permits it to live. If it's the true love that we all seek for, then it survives death. This is what I think and I hope it's possible. Enough with the philosophy for now, I'm afraid to not beat around the bush. A syntagma caught my attention: "You feel paradoxically the death through necromancy" - It's very interesting. I wish you a lot of inspiration! Alina
=  To Cãtãrãu Alina - Andreea	Andreea Maresi [22.Jun.10 19:27]
Thank you very much..This is what I tried to show... A association between love and death, of course in a philosophical way. I'm agree with you...and a false love is death itself, at least for our soul... But you can feel the eternal death through love. Thank you..i'm so glad that you like it. I wish you the same Andreea
=  a little error	Cãtãrãu Alina - Andreea [22.Jun.10 21:08]
"I'm agree" is not correct in English. "I agree" it's the correct version. :)
=  You've right	Andreea Maresi [23.Jun.10 09:45]
Thank you for correct my mistake..I knew it, but I think I was a little absent-minded. :)