= p | Veronica Valeanu [03.May.11 11:48] |
the ending seems a bit ambiguous and it would be a pity 1[what is the sense of no in your eye?] 2[what is the sense of no in the eye?] that [you] seems rather lost, with little support even from the inside meaning | |
= . | Petru Teodor [03.May.11 20:28] |
...yes! I've forgotten "the" article from the eye... (:)) But is a game of hearing & seeing, as well as my philosophy hidden inside. So why don't you give it another chance (21-87)? I will do my own critic over this text in a few days. But as usual, no I am pretty pleased of this form. Thank you for your presence here as well as on the other side! Your commentaries are helping me a lot. I've saw that you've evolved well on agonia. God speed! trying to, but never the same, pt. | |
+ yes | Veronica Valeanu [04.May.11 08:31] |
{I} is perfect! | |
+ welcome | dan marius [05.May.11 18:01] |
yes indeed. loved the idea. welcome. | |
= . | Petru Teodor [08.May.11 11:08] |
thank you for your warm welcoming. that was unexpected! Cheers, mates! pt. p.s.: I will write more tomorrow. | |