| + numb, hot, allergic | ion a [03.Oct.11 05:01] |
| i really liked it, particularly the second half, up until the very last word (why not hangover instead of sexuality, might fit better with the rest) "kissing my lover's photo" might be a little cliché - pun really intended :) maybe i'm wrong, but i get this impression that you just don't have the patience to go over your poems a third or a fifth time, just for the hell of it :) keep going | |
| = hectic reality | Diana Todea [07.Oct.11 20:42] |
| Yes indeed Ion, this hectic reality is full of cliches and sexuality. I tried to keep things in the order I felt them and they are true most of them. I'm usually inclined to keep an authentic form of the emotions I felt and I like to focus on their realism. Sometimes I do not want to change some expressions because they are true with themselves, sometimes obviously I pass over the text to search for the right form. So it depends. I like writing so I will keep going. Thanks for the input and the encouragement. Have a nice weekend! | |