| = Hello!:) | Corina Gina Papouis [20.Nov.11 15:35] |
| Hi there and welcome on Agonia (English). I wanted to love your poem but it has quite a few grammar errors: 1 - on the edge 2 - he can fly away 3 - in place 4 - both shapes 5 - to be loved 6- smarter I know that once you make these changes your rhythm and rhyming will be out' the window, but I trust you'll work on it and ..make it shine for the reader :) Cheers! Corina | |