| = POV | James A Williams [27.Jan.12 15:16] |
| This is a unique POV and the English is not bad at all. I think you give away the fact the fact that it is the graffiti POV too soon, but that is simply an opinion, and I like the story. It has the feel of being inspired by graffiti you actually saw. "I pray to hold on until summer begins. I mean until the terrace opens again." I would make this into one sentence thus: "I pray to hold on until summer begins, until the terrace opens again." I will be checking out more of your stories. jaw | |