| = tongue | Dely Cristian Marian [19.Feb.13 22:46] |
| Quite interesting; this poetry is really into arguing... for the sake of a mighty pair perhaps. It feels like you took its quarrel into your poetry for the wisdom of it. But, what a fine sentence! “Or both of you the tongue will miss” - I would've used 'shall'. And I guess you'll believe me if I say that I sent two haiku (recently made) to a contest just a couple of minutes before reading this poetry and the second had a 'tongue' involved in the end. Well, I've said it because it's been like a déjà vu to me. Hope I'll read your new poetry soon, dcm | |
| = * | Bodea Diana Mihaela [21.Nov.13 05:45] |
| Thank you Cristian. I haven't been so into poetry lately but I decided to visit my "poetic home" and revise some texts. It is very good your observation, "shall" is really better. | |