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Dely Cristian Marian
|Quite interesting; this poetry is really into arguing... for the sake of a mighty pair perhaps.|
It feels like you took its quarrel into your poetry for the wisdom of it. But, what a fine sentence!
“Or both of you the tongue will miss” - I would've used 'shall'.
And I guess you'll believe me if I say that I sent two haiku (recently made) to a contest just a couple of minutes before reading this poetry and the second had a 'tongue' involved in the end. Well, I've said it because it's been like a déjà vu to me.
Hope I'll read your new poetry soon,
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Bodea Diana Mihaela
|Thank you Cristian. I haven't been so into poetry lately but I decided to visit my "poetic home" and revise some texts. It is very good your observation, "shall" is really better.|