| = tempo | Dely Cristian Marian [05.Feb.13 22:25] |
| Hi Adi, I like its fluency, the rhythm, its pronouncement. It feels as if 'hushing' is the only needed miracle, poetry's "right here and right now"; maybe expecting unawares new wonders to come after the silence. It's visible that you master the rhymes as well as the frame of mind. Cheers, dcm | |
| + classicism worth reading... | Romulus Campan [06.Feb.13 00:50] |
| I entirely subscribe to dcm's very accurate opinion, myself adding nothing else than having the very pleasant surprise of reading again poetry which made my own delight and sweet rhyme chasing sweat time for quite long:-) I finally gave in like many philosophically oriented writers to a more loose style which allows for it. I must recognise with great delight and bit of envy, that your fluency is absolutely brilliant, worthy of any classic! And please, do not shy away, I am just being honest, as my as my envy allows:-) With friendly respect, rc | |
| = *... | Romulus Campan [06.Feb.13 00:53] |
| Oh, and Adi, you don't need to add the title within the text's body as it appears in the upper title frame:-) | |
| = anger from despire *hush | raj thampi [06.Feb.13 08:21] |
| Anger from despair, my windows phone continuously failed me from posting the comment. I was in Iasi for the first time during 2003 March, walking through the limes I promised myself that I will get back there, once again one day before I breathe last. Reading through your wonderful write has made me feel, whatever your penned down there. I have limited vocabulary, hence I limit myself saying "I felt it" A wonderful write from a person who was lucky enough to feel all those emotions. All the best Adi regards, raj | |
| = Thank you | Adi Niculae [06.Feb.13 11:45] |
| Thank you all for your appreciation, I am glad that my voice has an echo! Best regards to you, Adi | |
| = like | Corina Gina Papouis [06.Feb.13 15:51] |
| the first stanza has a special zing to it: it took me to the Tower of Love through torture and hope of a medieval heart. I would have suggested the same style/ tone as towards the end it turns into mundane. a nice read! | |
| = as it comes to you | raj thampi [06.Feb.13 17:33] |
| To continue, i would suggest you should continue the end as it comes to you :) hello corina, long time no see. | |
| = as it comes...to Raj:-) | Romulus Campan [06.Feb.13 22:18] |
| Raj my friend, I wouldn't want for a second to interfere into your kind "hello" to Corina, and I hope you take it with the same friendliness as I am writing it to you, but the site doesn't encourage comments to comments, especially when it's about an editor's comment to a new contributor. I am fully aware of the innocence of your gesture, which should have raised no concerns if posted under any of Corina's texts. I hope to have your gentlemen's understanding of this matter... With friendly respect, rc | |