| = cut the final part | Dana Muºat [05.Nov.05 20:24] |
| I thing is a hard poem when you read it for the first time, but it has interesant ideeas, original, i liked. But cut the final part of the poem, there is no effect in that repetition. Or you can cut only a part of it. | |
| = cut the kids in half, release me | Sigartau Alex [06.Nov.05 03:27] |
| it's the moment of realization and the mute despair that comes with it | |
| = you really have no break..hehe.. | Sheila Marie Ogaña [07.Nov.05 15:25] |
| so many "we have no brakes."i think i understand the effect that you want but its too many.. | |
| = no damn brakes | Sigartau Alex [07.Nov.05 23:20] |
| it is necessary for these four words to get right into my skull and terminate its functions with repeated occurrence until i can understand and see and hear and feel and hurt and hope and love and obey and curse and hate and bitter (over) nothing else; final inhibition disappearance: crash. | |