| = clear message,metaphors that don't make a lot of sense | Bobeica Razvan [16.Apr.08 15:48] |
| The message of the poem is clear,but your metaphors and your figures of speach don't coagulate,they're a little chaotic and here and there don;t make a lot of sense,in my opinion | |
| = thank you for the comment! | Marius Surleac [16.Apr.08 16:26] |
| I understand your opinion and the metaphors really have sense; exactly this is the idea - to withdraw the first idea thundered in mind, is what I wanted to express for a quite weird feeling for a different kind of mental anguish. Thank you for you comment! Cheers! | |
| = ... | Marius Surleac [16.Apr.08 16:43] |
| you'll find the whole idea in the title... | |
| = Thank you | Bobeica Razvan [19.Apr.08 10:49] |
| I know what you wanted to transmit.I want to thank you for your comments and feedback and let you know that I am open to criticism and was not angry,I was just trying to better explain my poem.Thank you again | |
| = !!! | Marius Surleac [20.Apr.08 15:23] |
| Ok Razvan! I understand you perfectly well. Thanks! | |