| = !!! | Marius Surleac [29.Jul.08 10:02] |
| My opinion is that the poem has two parts: a bad one and a good one. Well the bad part that doesn't look so good is the first one. You have repeated too much "I fall" and loses from the strength of the poem. The second part is ok. My suggestion is to improve the first part, to cut some "I fall" and then maybe will look better. | |