| = !!! | Marius Surleac [25.Sep.08 22:27] |
| Not always the rhyme means everything - here is quite forced and doesn't flow. Also, the repetition of "may you" kills the beautiful parts of the poem, it burdens it. | |
| = Because of poetry... | Andreea Maresi [14.Jun.10 18:37] |
| I really like this kind of poetry...I remembered of a special sensible person reading it. I let experts criticize. Keep it up! By the way, also for me it seems interesting to finish the poetry with the title. | |