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= Some errors here:
John Willy Kopperud
[12.Oct.08 11:30]
First: so much dynamite OR so man dynamite BARS.
(I used tha last dynamite BAR)
And I think you want to express that you
TOOK THE SHOCK WAVE ALL ALONE.
Cut out THAT I TOOK prior to all the way to drunkenness.Again;
dynamite, or a dynamite BAR, gave birth to her.
TEARS her away
Lastly: The last dynamite BAR
strongly sweeps her away.
If you accomplish these changes, we'll see about the approving of the text.
Cheers from Willy
= see you next time, Thanks
Ioana Camelia Popa
[14.Oct.08 20:23]
You mean "dynamite BARS" as "a piece of dynamite"... I don`t mean the shock wave, but the shroud wave, or the veil... it will remain veil, and I will change the topic, where I could`ve done better...

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= Some errors here:	John Willy Kopperud [12.Oct.08 11:30]
First: so much dynamite OR so man dynamite BARS. (I used tha last dynamite BAR) And I think you want to express that you TOOK THE SHOCK WAVE ALL ALONE. Cut out THAT I TOOK prior to all the way to drunkenness.Again; dynamite, or a dynamite BAR, gave birth to her. TEARS her away Lastly: The last dynamite BAR strongly sweeps her away. If you accomplish these changes, we'll see about the approving of the text. Cheers from Willy

= see you next time, Thanks	Ioana Camelia Popa [14.Oct.08 20:23]
You mean "dynamite BARS" as "a piece of dynamite"... I don`t mean the shock wave, but the shroud wave, or the veil... it will remain veil, and I will change the topic, where I could`ve done better...