| = . | Laurenþiu Ion [30.Jan.09 23:17] |
| here`s a strong bite, it attracts. I can taste my silence in the words great poem | |
| = too abstract | Diana Todea [31.Jan.09 11:53] |
| Well, I think is a bit too abstract, for ex. "is the eternal word and the space’s trap" makes me void. Is like a feeling when you read something and it cuts your sensation of dreaming or going further. Feelings are needed too in order to create an emotion in the reader. Just my opinion. Nevertheless, on the whole the poem is good. Cheers, Diana. | |
| = Thank you Laurentiu, Diana! | Marius Surleac [01.Feb.09 15:10] |
| Laurentiu, thank you very much for your kind comment - in a certain way you have a point with that "silence" especially when's about universality. Diana, probably is a bit too abstract - In Romanian language I have posted this text to the collection of philosophical texts, but I haven't pointed out this issue in the subtitle - probably I will. The whole idea of Dharma is the message that surrounds and makes connection with our human individuality and the oriental meanings for it, the connections as well. The last line is more about the flow of time, the word of God and space that is part of us and also contains us. Indeed, there are feelings too there but I'm sorry you couldn't see their prints. Thank you very much! Cheers both, Marius | |