| = hugs paul | raj thampi [01.May.05 20:26] |
| hehehe :P Thanks, it lightened my stressful evening Paul :) so sweet | |
| = try more ! | Grosu Luiza-Oana [20.May.05 02:55] |
| first verse: "my homework is writing a story about my family" your poem it's just a series of relatives. i'm not interested on the names of your family's members. tell me more about them, about their lives, their events. convince me! | |
| = hehe..nice :) | Nancy M. Popa [09.Jun.05 13:21] |
| Hi there Paul.Nice writing.I liked best the end ,"I am an only child. But I have three cousins. They are girls.". I bet that the fact that they are girls not boys annoys you a little,right?;).Is a good thing you posted it as a personal. Anyway,nice start.I hope to read more of what you'll write, because I hope that you' ll continue to write. P.S.Oana : is "interested in" ,not "interested on", and family members,not family's , because the members are of his family.If you don't believe me ,try the dictionary. All the best Paul.And good luck. See ya, Nancy | |