| = 'monastery puzzle...' | Vasilescu Alvin Bastian [09.Jun.05 15:06] |
| 'monastery puzzle in the peace of my hands' 'angels of shadow leaking from my veins...' Now this is beautiful... a text rich in images and feelings. ...bright words falling to create this great text...a puzzle indeed... Keep it on & all the best 2 U! ...Bastian... | |
| = opinion... | scorus ilinca [09.Jun.05 23:46] |
| "mimosas in the snow"...it seems so light, so easy to see, to hold, to lose...the tezt is too rich in images in my opinion and loses the great image created by the title... "monastery puzzle in the peace of my palms"-very pure image, beautiful and "pain syncope pain syncope pain syncope mimosas in the snow" just surprised me...the huge pain and then the light mimosas in the snow... the same sad tone that just hits in the end... good work but next time let them breath, ok? :) | |
| = mimosas in the snow | Monica Manolachi [10.Jun.05 08:59] |
| Alvin, thank you for your comments. the original text belongs to Silvia Caloianu. I found some beautiful and compelling images in it. Moreover, since I felt in me something like a mimosa, it did not take long to translate it. Ilinca, it is true that sometime the images overcrowd disorderly in her poems, but I think they are meant to decorate a path to some place of peace: the sleep. Is sleep a place of peace? I don't know. It's only an opinion. Read the original if you want to compare... The next poem is mine. :) | |