| = quick! | ion amariutei [24.Jun.05 20:00] |
| *the touch of my women on my chest* you better change that before she gets to a dictionary :) | |
| = Beautiful imagery | Daniela Popa [06.Jul.05 00:06] |
| In line 8 I'd rather say: "They do not go anywhere anymore" or "they did not go anywhere anymore"... This line knocked me down: I kill...my left step and my right step. Beautiful imagery, well done. Prozac | |
| = ummm | Victoria Morariu [17.Aug.05 23:06] |
| U have some spelling mistakes there but i suppose that u allow only positive critics... | |
| = Excelent!!! | Marius Surleac [25.Jan.08 01:07] |
| A very good text. The feeling of self distruction from the last part of the text, gives me the idea of inside revolution, of protection for something that only you know what. Good job! | |