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Veronica Valeanu
[01.Nov.09 13:03]
His instead of It's

the last 3 poems you have posted here would have more impact if re-written in prose. Thus, you would have more freedom to juggle with a certain orientation in providing arguments and counter-arguments in order to reach the conclusion you desired.

poetry doesn't allow easily room for conclusions
it's as if you tried to find the proper space inside your house for an object that is dear to you
so, good luck in redecorating
who knows you may like it even more pleasure
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Veronica Valeanu
[01.Nov.09 13:05]
it may give you even more pleasure
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mazHur
[02.Nov.09 16:33]
thanks..
have changed the gender form..

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= design	Veronica Valeanu [01.Nov.09 13:03]
His instead of It's the last 3 poems you have posted here would have more impact if re-written in prose. Thus, you would have more freedom to juggle with a certain orientation in providing arguments and counter-arguments in order to reach the conclusion you desired. poetry doesn't allow easily room for conclusions it's as if you tried to find the proper space inside your house for an object that is dear to you so, good luck in redecorating who knows you may like it even more pleasure

= err	Veronica Valeanu [01.Nov.09 13:05]
it may give you even more pleasure

= thanks	mazHur [02.Nov.09 16:33]
thanks.. have changed the gender form..