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= Hi David
Corina Gina Papouis
[16.Dec.09 18:17]
why in CAPITALS? please do review the text...
Many thanks,
Corina
= .
Corina Gina Papouis
[16.Dec.09 19:06]
naked?...and the title needs to be in lower case as well, please....
= ...
Marius Surleac
[17.Dec.09 08:34]
there should be others' or other's taking into account the apostrophe.

As Corina pointed, should be naked instead of necked, cause necked means something else and doesn't fit with lying

Anyhow, this poem looks better, it has good imagery and feelings well suggested

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= Hi David	Corina Gina Papouis [16.Dec.09 18:17]
why in CAPITALS? please do review the text... Many thanks, Corina

= .	Corina Gina Papouis [16.Dec.09 19:06]
naked?...and the title needs to be in lower case as well, please....

= ...	Marius Surleac [17.Dec.09 08:34]
there should be others' or other's taking into account the apostrophe. As Corina pointed, should be naked instead of necked, cause necked means something else and doesn't fit with lying Anyhow, this poem looks better, it has good imagery and feelings well suggested