| = i know what you did on january 7th :) | ion a [17.Jan.10 07:18] |
| i really enjoyed it, but i don't think it needs an explicit conclusion, like the one in the last stanza. don't know, might sound too much like a caricature, but might work too, something like: Hüyuk stumbled into his grave/ just two years later/ with most of the foreign dignitaries/ still missing | |
| = That's a very good suggestion, ion! | John Willy Kopperud [17.Jan.10 12:13] |
| It does look better that way, it's true, so I will edit the last part accordingly. Thanks a lot! Yesterday I considered erasing this poem. Cheers from Willy | |