= to the point | Corina Gina Papouis [08.Feb.10 13:10] |
this is another good poem: it has power and (as the previous one I read from you) has a point!:) I think this line has a little mistake: 'tomorrow we’ll a plant a tree' - cut the a prior to plant. I'll keep reading you! cheers, Corina | |
= Thought provoking | Kuldeep Kumar Srivastava [08.Feb.10 17:16] |
The lines impressing me the most are "memories from the Museum of wishes"...."I felt my life was too empty"..."I thought it was inside me" and " the straight line is avoiding the point". These, i think, define the crux of this thought provoking poem. Felt good. Regards KK | |
= thanks | Iulia Tache [09.Feb.10 11:00] |
Thank you both for your kind words (and for reading the poem, in the first place). Corina, you're right about the "a", it's a typo; I don't know how I failed to notice it, but I surely know that you pay attention to the stuff you read, which is really something to be appreciated :) | |