| = . | Veronica Valeanu [20.Apr.10 12:11] |
| some mistakes but also some parts that could work as thoughts, not as part of a poem. VV | |
| = :) | Corina Gina Papouis [22.Apr.10 15:13] |
| this reminds me of a song by Enrique Iglesias...however, the text needs a good re-think: do you want/ don't want rhyme? want/ do not want rhythm?...the way it stands now it fails on both counts... happy ping-pong:) | |