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Corina Gina Papouis
[14.Aug.10 11:47]
I surprise myself
my todays are leaking.

liked the idea of 'thought in thought'...explore it a bit deeper!


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John Willy Kopperud
[14.Aug.10 17:45]
-you need something before "leaf", namely "a" or "the." Second; I can't make sense of the line:
"Like a falling water to it's spring."
Did you wish to express something like:
"Like the falling water in a fountain." ? Just a suggestion. Please make the necessary clarifications!
Cheers from Willy

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Corina Gina Papouis
[09.Nov.10 20:02]
please review above suggestions, so the poem can make sense.

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