| = . | Veronica Valeanu [20.Aug.10 21:06] |
| there is a part I won't be forgetting too soon: [to give my soldiers their Caligula before the enemy strikes] like lines of force drawn to make roads | |
| = Corina | Luminita Suse [22.Aug.10 15:51] |
| Interesting piece of poetry. I paused a bit thinking that the image of chapped lips could introduce some ambiguity due to multiple meanings of the adjective 'cracked': 1. skin roughened as a result of cold or exposure 2. of paint or varnish; having the appearance of alligator hide 3. informal or slang term for mentally irregular Did you translate it from Romanian or wrote it directly in English? | |
| + Elegantly shaped- | John Willy Kopperud [22.Aug.10 17:47] |
| -with references to Caligula and Bach. A rich poem indeed. Cheers from Willy | |
| = re/ turn 2 in 0 cent | Corina Gina Papouis [22.Aug.10 21:09] |
| veronica, may those lines make viaducts and stay with you for a while..:) Luminita, cracked (chapped would have been insufficient in meaning here)- a little word which taken out of context means all of the above, cracked lips = thirst/ a need/ a necessity and if the reader takes a further step back second stanza is...an attempt to describe sheer longing and passion. (..and no, is not a translation) willy, glad to see you here, as always, happy you enjoyed references to Caligula, Bach and the Jews under one roof..:) thank you for your kind appreciation. regards to all! | |
| = Reflection | Kuldeep Kumar Srivastava [27.Aug.10 19:29] |
| Mirrors don't reflect reality perfectly but your poem does. | |
| = context | James M Zealy, Jr [27.Aug.10 21:43] |
| My native language is english, and you command of the language is impressive, and you are quite correct, context is everything with adjectives that can have multiple meanings. It adds to the interpretation if there are multiple possibilities of how the language can be interpreted. Part of the joy in reading it is following the flow to see where the language takes you. | |
| = Kuldeep | John Willy Kopperud [28.Aug.10 13:28] |
| Your statement about mirrors is absolutely to the point. Nevertheless, they are utterly intriguing in poetry, aren't they? Cheers from Willy | |
| = Gentlemen! | Corina Gina Papouis [30.Aug.10 23:05] |
| honoured to see such conversations down under my poem...smoke and mirrors are great if your name is Copperfield...I like to keep my poetry as close to earth as possible although there is a blue bird in my heart (as Bukowski would put it:))..Language? what a great tool..it 'll never seize to amaze me: its birth, its development, the way we use it, here, now, there, in a decade... I am, again, happy to see you all gathered on a subject which, I'm sure, is far from being close to its ending...Brandies and cigars please (bring the illegal ones!:D) let this thought settle... cheers to all! to language and poetry! | |