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Marius Surleac
[11.Nov.10 22:02]
i do enjoy rhymed poetry so this one really goes well. I like how you play with the metrics - 8 - 9 and then mixed them up. But you should be careful when mixing, you need to find the words in such a way to avoid gaps in the rhythm. You have some in the last stanza.

Cheers!
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Mihai Cãtãlin
[20.Nov.10 17:20]
Thank you for your comments and praise! I am aware of the few discrepancies in rhythm here and there and I acknowledge them as meant imprefections - I have to admit I didn't give much thought to the form, but rather concentrated on the conveyed image.

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= points	Marius Surleac [11.Nov.10 22:02]
i do enjoy rhymed poetry so this one really goes well. I like how you play with the metrics - 8 - 9 and then mixed them up. But you should be careful when mixing, you need to find the words in such a way to avoid gaps in the rhythm. You have some in the last stanza. Cheers!

= reply	Mihai Cãtãlin [20.Nov.10 17:20]
Thank you for your comments and praise! I am aware of the few discrepancies in rhythm here and there and I acknowledge them as meant imprefections - I have to admit I didn't give much thought to the form, but rather concentrated on the conveyed image.