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= POV
James A Williams
[27.Jan.12 15:16]
This is a unique POV and the English is not bad at all. I think you give away the fact the fact that it is the graffiti POV too soon, but that is simply an opinion, and I like the story. It has the feel of being inspired by graffiti you actually saw.

"I pray to hold on until summer begins. I mean until the terrace opens again."
I would make this into one sentence thus:
"I pray to hold on until summer begins, until the terrace opens again."

I will be checking out more of your stories.

jaw

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= POV	James A Williams [27.Jan.12 15:16]
This is a unique POV and the English is not bad at all. I think you give away the fact the fact that it is the graffiti POV too soon, but that is simply an opinion, and I like the story. It has the feel of being inspired by graffiti you actually saw. "I pray to hold on until summer begins. I mean until the terrace opens again." I would make this into one sentence thus: "I pray to hold on until summer begins, until the terrace opens again." I will be checking out more of your stories. jaw