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 =  some ideas...
Romulus Campan Maramuresanu
[10.Dec.12 15:13]
Hi there,

Please reconsider as there are some serious grammar problems, like 1st verse of 2nd stanza, some rather weird attempts of rhyme, and two whole verses in French, which would need at least some translation at the bottom, as not everybody visiting these pages has to necessarily know French.
I would recommend trying free-verse, that may help the flow of your otherwise original way of poetical expression


 =  thanks
[10.Dec.12 21:19]
I've translated those verses, didn't cross my mind that it would be necessary. Thanks for your message and for the mistakes alert.

 =  encouragement...
Romulus Campan Maramuresanu
[10.Dec.12 21:33]

There is, in my opinion, still work to be done on this text, as myself have some experience in the style you've written this text. Nevertheless, your ideas, the way you express them bear the mark of originality, these being the encouragement reasons why I consider this text as passing the level into the main page.
Please do consider writing in free-style also, as you'll find a completely different world of expressing yourself outside the barriers of classicism.

Looking forward to reading more from you.


 =  Kindly
[11.Dec.12 10:18]
You are very kind, your words mean a lot to me, I shall take into considerations your advice.

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