| = Suggestions | Corina Gina Papouis [06.Feb.13 16:55] |
| Hi straighten would sound better. also the rhyming and the rhythm need a bit more polishing. | |
| = thank you | Bodea Diana Mihaela [06.Feb.13 18:02] |
| Thank you, Gina, for the suggestion, indeed it sounds better. I will read it again and try to give it a better shape. | |
| = difficult path... | Romulus Campan [07.Feb.13 18:52] |
| Hi DM, I very much agree with Corina. The whole poem's meaning and message are being overshadowed by the mentioned problems... As I have previously said, classicism makes poetry extreemly demanding, mainly when there's a message to convey... The time toll to be invested for classicism's sake excedes in my oppinion the limited results one could obtain by pursuing its path... rc | |
| = it is hard | Bodea Diana Mihaela [07.Feb.13 23:57] |
| :-) it is hard for me to mix the free verse with the meaning I want to ss thorugh my lyrics. I will work at this. Thank you, RC. Kindly, GG | |