| = hello | Motoc Lavinia [15.Feb.17 19:48] |
| I came here lured in by the title and I've found ' where hands rest in birds', so my journey to your page was all worth it. Here I am now, dissecting through your poem ( if I am allowed, of course). ' I feel like I intangible float through my dream' is far too busy and not Rococo enough. Maybe you meant to make intangible into an adverb? You've just planted a seed, remember to come back and water it. | |