| = opinion | ion amariutei [03.Jan.06 07:50] |
| i would say, "What makes a verse real/ is life oozing from it" Joshua, this is as old as it can be but poetry is not a way of thinking, it’s a way of feeling Do you really feel anything while reading: “A verity needed to be autarchic”? | |
| = ion amariutei | Joshua Vasquez Butawan [03.Jan.06 12:54] |
| Yeah I do feel something while reading, but i guess Its not enough, those words coming from within is needed to be freed, What is the meaning of your I love you if you don't make me feel it, perhaps her words are like poem without author. I know there is somebody out there, I can feel it Even if I can't see her, I did extend my bounderies Even if i don't know her, The way I ardor the unkown is the truth of my existence needed to be freed away from the captivation of shame, and remorse, I should stand on my bare foot and break free for it, I should strip that kind of thing, this *woo* is not just a fantasy, it's now for real. " it's a dedication but where did it come from? Who wrote it? Even if The author is unknown I still appreciate her lyrics. | |
| = P.s | Joshua Vasquez Butawan [03.Jan.06 13:02] |
| I try to hide the reality, by placing some complicated/unfamiliar words, but what happens more often is misleading and confusion, I think i should limit my exageration, It would be better If I'll simplify so that the true intention will unveil... isn't? | |
| = Joshua | ion amariutei [04.Jan.06 14:52] |
| sorry, i should have explained better. it’s not that you can’t use deep thoughts in poetry, is that art (poetry included) is primarily a form of entertainment. greek tragedy or shakespearian plays express some of the most profound ideas about human nature and destiny. but they're wrapped (or sugar coated) in conflict, in drama, there is action, tension, etc. in other words, they are, first and foremost, tongue in cheek "shows" it doesn’t really matter “what” you say, but “how” you say it. in art, you can’t afford to be boring, to “say” things, you have to “show” them and do it in a spectacular, interesting way. in other words, you need to put some meet on your ideas :) | |
| = correction | ion amariutei [04.Jan.06 14:56] |
| "put some meat on your ideas" | |
| = i'll put some spices and everything nice! | Joshua Vasquez Butawan [06.Jan.06 03:29] |
| Well I guess wht i have to do is to put some toppings, in that case it might add up some customs to my degree, I'll put somekind of stuff and then so on, I'll just gotta express everything in a very interesting way, i just have to say what i wanna say, coz a bit of salt, pepper, sugar and other spices would do the job, but one thing i must make sure, and that thing must fit to the kinda stuff I'm weaving, much of that will gonna enhance. thnx for that, I still really gotta learn more! | |
| = Joshua Vasquez Butawan | raj thampi [06.Jan.06 10:43] |
| Joshua, Whatever you tried to express through this poem must be very special and divine for you. For the first time in my life I came across words which are available only with dictionaries. Great work buddy, keep it up :) Poetry is not randomly picked toughest words, but transmitting your feelings to a second person the easiest way, understandable way. You are young, I hope what I said makes some changes in your attitude towards writing. raj | |
| = exactly! | ion amariutei [06.Jan.06 18:59] |
| Well I guess what i have to do is put some toppings in that case it might add up some customs to my degree I'll put somekind of stuff and then so on, I'll just gotta express everything in a very interesting way i just have to say what i wanna say coz a bit of salt pepper, sugar and other spices would do the job but one thing i must make sure and that thing must fit to the kinda stuff I'm weaving much of that will gonna enhance | |
| = Thanks | Joshua Vasquez Butawan [08.Jan.06 10:05] |
| Thanks guys for helping and passing by! all of your remains were greatly appreciated, I'll look forward of seeing all of u! :-) Josh | |