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 =  Also very eloquent in classical style...
John Willy Kopperud
[14.Jun.08 19:46]
...this one, Ionut. The finishing line is particularly strong:
- The silence jumps from madness to abyss.
Cheers from Willy

 =  double meaning?
Marius Surleac
[15.Jun.08 12:48]
Self finding in the mist of the night, the crawlers of the past wait for you.
Though I have to ask you if those "seven thorns" are nothing more than seven words and, leaving behind the fact that your last line is made of seven words, these seven thorns should have the meaning of Jesus' last seven words: “Father, into your hands I commend my spirit."-Luke 23:46? - Because you've used "Will stick upon your mouth like seven thorns"

Best wishes,

 =  keep up the good work
Vicleanu Mihaita
[15.Jun.08 22:42]
great job ..."The silence jumps from madness to abyss"...loved kind regards

 =  you hit the rock!
Marius Surleac
[17.Jun.08 21:39]
I think that, as a final conclusion, you hit our hearts and you have talent; that's why this sonnet should hit the first page.

Best wishes and keep going like that because it's the right and the good path.


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