| = A good piece of poetry... | John Willy Kopperud [12.Oct.08 13:55] |
| ...but, take notice; in the fourth stanza I think your syntax would profit by altering this to something like: The mind tied tigt to... And the last stanza; there you should definitely write And THE heart...THE heart is an overheated engine. Cheers from Willy | |
| = true | Vicleanu Mihaita [12.Oct.08 15:55] |
| thank you Willy. You're right! I'm glad you like it.. My kind regards,Mihai | |
| = You really got my interest | Simona Sumanaru [12.Oct.08 18:44] |
| Mihai. See, I commented on just about everything you posted lately. Still I'm on to you about all those commas. If you want a pause, just make the next words a different line. Commas hinder the flow of your poems. I agree with Willy, "the mind is TIED to a bird". You have a highly detailed vision on things/life. That's a wonderful gift to have. | |
| = silly mistake.. | Vicleanu Mihaita [12.Oct.08 22:39] |
| Darn ....the thing is when I wrote the poem ...i did put tied...but when I posted it here....i changed it...without really reading...that was reckless from me...and .i thank you for reading what i post and i am glad i got your interest....thank you for your words A LOT!! My kind regards, Mihai | |
| = Don't worry | Simona Sumanaru [14.Oct.08 23:42] |
| be happy, like that song says. And keep having detailed vision. :-) | |