| = liked it | Diana Todea [15.Dec.08 12:40] |
| I liked your poem, however it could use some rephrasing. I liked the images and the message, but not the words utilized, too many instances of "then" that interrupt the reading's flow. Maybe restructuring the stanzas will turn the poem with a new shape. So my kind advice would be to give it a second thought. Cheers, Diana. | |
| = you are right | Vicleanu Mihaita [11.Mar.09 13:43] |
| thank you for reading. i did eliminate that THEN....:)...you are always welcomed here. my kind regards, mihai | |