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Diana Todea
[15.Dec.08 12:40]
I liked your poem, however it could use some rephrasing. I liked the images and the message, but not the words utilized, too many instances of "then" that interrupt the reading's flow. Maybe restructuring the stanzas will turn the poem with a new shape. So my kind advice would be to give it a second thought. Cheers, Diana.

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Vicleanu Mihaita
[11.Mar.09 13:43]
thank you for reading. i did eliminate that THEN....:) are always welcomed here.
my kind regards, mihai

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