| = Maria | Corina Gina Papouis [03.Jun.09 16:40] |
| Hi Maria, The message was clear, however, you need to work a bit on your grammar. These are the things I picked on (from the beginning): Jumped, looking for it, forgot about it, begun, cricket’s song, caught, put it, any more, his song (or he sang) The verbs a re a bit all over the place, and 'the didn’t sing no more' is not quite English but more slang. Otherwise I quite liked your little character. :) Best wishes, Corina | |
| = rectification | Maria Tirenescu [03.Jun.09 20:01] |
| Thank you, Corina! | |
| = . | Laurenţiu Ion [17.Jun.09 13:01] |
| there's cricket instead of criket ("from the door sash criket' song: the new lodger") | |
| = ... | Maria Tirenescu [17.Jun.09 13:29] |
| Thank you, Laurentiu! Precipitation... | |