| + this is a real poem | Anca Veronica Anghel [13.Nov.03 00:30] |
| Wow, that's a poem ! I am impressed, congratulations and welcome. The part that I liked the most: "But who are they for you to say When you can leave and when to stay? You cannot live, you cannot choose " This is so true about who you are and who they are, about what you can do and who decides about this. In a world of freedom the actual freedom it is, and I think it always was, only on the surface. | |
| = to be born | Anca Veronica Anghel [13.Nov.03 00:36] |
| Forgot to tell you: "So, why to BE born when you will lose? " | |
| = The hope is there. We just have to find it | Olteanu Irina [13.Nov.03 11:24] |
| Thank you very much for your comment. I also like very much this poem of mine. It is all about the hope we try to find inside ourselves, the hope that helps us believe that our life has a meaning. | |
| = Put more work into it | Iuliana Ungureanu [18.Nov.03 21:11] |
| It seems to me like you didn't put too much time and thought into this poem. I didn't understand half of it, what's "you've picked a way for all your life" ?? The rhyming seems very stretched and cliche: choose-loose (used twice in the poem), same thing with stay-say. | |
| = Everything that always matters are feeling! | Catalina Odolean [18.Nov.03 21:11] |
| To write with burning passion, To write with your own soul Is more than things could whisper Of everything and all! | |
| = For Iuliana | Olteanu Irina [21.Nov.03 11:34] |
| It's a simetry but I guess you didn't think that this could be the reason for my repetition? And about the other thing you said, a poetry must be felt not thought. "You've picked a way for all your life" means the way you choose to be, the mask underneath you hide yourself. PS: Imperfection can be beautiful. | |
| = Thank you Catalina | Olteanu Irina [21.Nov.03 11:35] |
| I appreciate very much your comment and I agree with you. Sometimes words are not enough! | |