| = suggestion | ion amariutei [07.Oct.04 19:45] |
| it might sound more natural like *ablaze again the stainless wings of phoenix* and *slow down the story* otherwise a quiet meditation with a surprise ending | |
| = One of my first read poems here | Peter Szabo [13.Oct.04 11:46] |
| I'm new here, but if there are many pems like this...I mean, I'll be very much frustrated with my poems in English...The end is really great, hitting hard on expressive lines. | |
| = recomendations | Joshua Butawan [15.Oct.04 17:51] |
| It would be better if you will use some words of endearment, maybe using some of it might enhance the expressions of your poem. | |